Recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.
Nowadays, the crime rates among adolescents are dramatically gone up all around the world, especially in metropolis. I reckon
,
it could be welded from an increased ratio of unschooled generation, unfortunately.
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To begin
with, it is undoubted fact youngsters tend to leave school before completing high education level. Thus
, they are many uneducated people
around us. That sort of person prefers to commit a crime to gain money rather than work a regular job. Due to they do not have a bachelor's degree diploma, they do not have well-paid jobs. For instance
, my neighbour from college, who has been educated to be an engineer, stopped studying in his senior. He had been employed at a café. After a while he started to complain about her work. 2 years ago, I learnt he had caught while he was stealing money from the cash box. So it has resulted in an arrest.
On the other hand
, although
this
criminal case has increased recently, there are numerous ways to solve these problems one is
should be done by the government. Unnecessary verb
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For example
, People
should be encouraged to study at least their high school education and more with a compulsory curriculum. Even if young individuals desire to work and do not needed
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bachelor's
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a bachelor's
degrees
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degree
such
as being dishwasher
or cashier, if they complete Correct article usage
a dishwasher
education
on the relative side it should affect their salary Correct pronoun usage
their education
possitively
.
To conclude, by increasing the proportion of Correct your spelling
positively
people
who are educated, the trending delinquency rate among young people
can be reduced over time. The biggest responsibility in this
matter is of course the responsibility of the government.Submitted by altay0527 on
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