Some prople say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Advertising became the soul of the trade. Some people say advertising is very successful at persuading us to buy
things
, while others believe that it became so common that no one is paying attention to it. I think advertising has
important
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role in convincing us to buy
things
. For most
companies
, the consumer's mind became the area of interest, where the
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advertisement
advertisment
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advertising
companies
focus all the effort trying to get
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consumer
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conscious and subconscious
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attention. Since many
companies
start to hire neuroscientists and psychological
behavioral
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scientist
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in order to know consumer's
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, profits start rising steadily. To illustrate,
iphone
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iPhone
and
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iPad
users became emotionally attached to apple company, and they will buy their new products regardless
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new features, and if it is worth buying or not.
In contrast
, seeing too many advertisements minimizes their effect. Nowadays many
companies
introduce
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different
differtent
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different
types of products and all these
companies
use
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different
diiferent
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different
types of
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advertising
advertisment
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advertisement
, so because of the huge number of
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advertisements
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advertisement
, people stop
concetrate
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concentrate
with them and
that is
why
companies
are trying to put
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advertisements
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advertisements
in
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all roads, magazines, and all apps on our mobile phones, just to get some of consumers concentration. In conclusion,
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advertisement
advertising
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advertising
is becoming vitally important to some
companies
. Some people believe it
play
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major
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a major
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role in convincing us to buy
things
, while others believe it became useless and no one
focus
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on them. I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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it has
important
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an important
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role in persuading us to buy
things
.
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