Some people Are reducing their walks however ,many health experts say that it is not good.

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jogging while,fitness
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specialists
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raise a concern that it is not a good idea.
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with, nowadays folks are
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walking due
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many multifarious reasons. The most prominent factor is
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, due to their hectic work schedule, once they return from
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they feel energyless so they avoid walking even
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to gym for jogging due to its high level of technology machines,where they
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not only walk but
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calories they have burned.
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modern
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where you can set walking speed with
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of facilities
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people more
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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