People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?

For humans commercial occurs every day,

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that

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improves our lives. I personally believe that advertising has more benefits than flaws

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since it can be convenient and can save

our

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us

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time

.

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essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of promotion and provide a logical conclusion. On the one hand,

publicity

has a multitude of weaknesses. Advertising on the Internet is vulnerable to hacking or intruders.

Thus

, appeared a lot of bad unacceptable

advertisings

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advertisements

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such

as drugs,

casino

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casinos

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, pyramid

scheme

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schemes

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and so on.

For instance

, it was one accident in Astana about half a year ago. On the main street of Astana billboard advertising drugs and

it

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caused a commotion among the people.

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,

publicity

can give bad effects

to

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on

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children since advertisers

for

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promote

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promoting

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their product

show

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this

product in good view.

Although

,

this

product is not as useful as it is presented.

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, in the commercial, they say

there’s

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a lot of vitamins in the juice, but there’s

also

a high sugar level in the juice. On

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another

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hand, if we begin to control and filter the commercial, it will give us significant advantages.

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Firstly

First

Firtsly

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Firstly

,

publicity

significantly saves our

time

and energy since we can stay at home and recognize

about

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things that we need.

For instance

,

the

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marketing improved so much, that people can see the promotion everywhere and save

their

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time

to find something.

Also

, the commercial can call for doing good deeds. There

a

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multitude of

ad

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ads

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that

call

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to do something good.

For example

, charity commercial, which is a good example of the use of advertising. To conclude,

commercial

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the commercial

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has many disadvantages.

However

, if we will control and filter

publicity

, advertising will

a

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be a

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great way to save

time

and use

publicity

for good purposes.