People are surrounded by advertisement which has an increase effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effect of this outweigh the negative effects?
For humans commercial occurs every day,
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and that
that
improves our lives. I personally believe that advertising has more benefits than flawsCorrect pronoun usage
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since it can be convenient and can save Remove the comma
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our
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us
time
. This
essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of promotion and provide a logical conclusion.
On the one hand, publicity
has a multitude of weaknesses. Advertising on the Internet is vulnerable to hacking or intruders. Thus
, appeared a lot of bad unacceptable advertisings
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advertisements
such
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casinos
scheme
and so on. Fix the agreement mistake
schemes
For instance
, it was one accident in Astana about half a year ago. On the main street of Astana billboard advertising drugs and it
caused a commotion among the people. Correct pronoun usage
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In addition
, publicity
can give bad effects to
children since advertisers Change preposition
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for
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promote
their product Change the verb form
promoting
show
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and show
this
product in good view. Although
, this
product is not as useful as it is presented. For example
, in the commercial, they say there’s
a lot of vitamins in the juice, but there’s Wrong verb form
there are
also
a high sugar level in the juice.
On the
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another
hand, if we begin to control and filter the commercial, it will give us significant advantages. Correct quantifier usage
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publicity
significantly saves our time
and energy since we can stay at home and recognize about
things that we need. Change preposition
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For instance
, the
marketing improved so much, that people can see the promotion everywhere and save Correct article usage
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time
to find something. Also
, the commercial can call for doing good deeds. There a
multitude of Add a missing verb
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ad
that Fix the agreement mistake
ads
call
to do something good. Change the verb form
calls
For example
, charity commercial, which is a good example of the use of advertising.
To conclude, commercial
has many disadvantages. Add an article
the commercial
However
, if we will control and filter publicity
, advertising will a
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time
and use publicity
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