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Although there are a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 a convenience that we see popping up more and more around us these days. I have seen these being used in daily
life
 around me even very recently.
For example
, I was recently at the airport to travel from the east coast to the west coast of the US. While there, a passenger in line before me at the luggage
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 had his phone out and was talking to the attendants using his phone. On paying closer attention I realized, he was using
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translation
software
 to understand what they said and to respond back to them. It took some effort on both sides, but in the end, it worked!
This
 is a real-
life
 example of
translation
software
 making peoples' lives easier on a regular basis. Witnessing
this
 got me thinking - what would have happened in the absence of
this
 service being available literally on the tips of our fingers
.
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 In the absence of
this
 easy access to technology as we have today
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, it has come down to one thing - the human capacity to learn and communicate in more than one
language
. Coming from a multicultural background where none of my
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 spoke the same
language
 as me, it was inevitable that I would be exposed to multiple
languages
 since childhood.
This
 is a reality for most metropolitan cities around the world. When I was three years old and could communicate to some degree in my mother tongue or native
language
, my father ensured I
also
 learned another one of our National
languages
 that
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 prevalent in the region. By the time I was six-seven years old, I could conveniently speak
in
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two
languages
. Meanwhile, in school, I was
being
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exposed to the English alphabet
in addition
 to the two other
languages
 which made it easy to learn and understand English too. I can categorically say that knowing all three
languages
 made my
life
 infinitely easier for me since we moved around a lot due to my father's work arrangements. Later on, during my college days, I met my best friend of eighteen years and was exposed to her native
language
 or mother tongue and since
then
 have picked up a passing knowledge of the
language
 as well. The movies and plays around us while young used multiple
languages
 too and
as a
result
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 I have a passing knowledge of six
languages
 today.
This
 knowledge not only makes communicating a breeze for me in most areas
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 my country,
it
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 keeps my brain active. In conclusion, I believe while
translation
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software
softwares
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software
 definitely make
life
 easier for us on different occasions, being bilingual, trilingual, or a polyglot serves to make
life
 interesting and easy at the same time. Truly understanding and speaking a
language
 brings to light so many nuanced facets of an entire culture surrounding the
language
 which cannot be translated through
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translation
software
. It has been proven that learning multiple
languages
 helps keep the human brain adaptable and flexible - all marks of a young and active mind. From my personal experiences, I believe that the
translation
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softwares
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 serve as a quick solution to the
language
 barrier for people in general, learning a
language
 brings
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a level of richness to
ones
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 experience of
life
 as a whole.
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softwares
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 should
therefore
 not be considered as a replacement for learning a
language
 but as an aide to learning a new skill.
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