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Machines have taken over domestic jobs that used to be done by hand. What are the advantages and disadvantage of this? Give examples from your own experience.

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Using a machine for doing daily household chores has many positive effects on
people
.
However
, others argue that they have some drawbacks as well. Admittedly, there are numerous benefits of using
machines
 for various household purposes.
Firstly
, because
machines
 are sophisticated devices which enable enhance performance and productivity, a lot of
time
 can be saved and spent on other useful things
such
 as interacting more often with family and friends.
Secondly
, despite the fact that
machines
 in most cases use non-renewable energy which is having a devastating effect on the environment, they
also
 enable to lessen the physical burden faced by human beings by doing the work automatically rather than manually.
Thirdly
,
machines
 empower
people
 to save food of different kinds and other commodities for an extended period of
time
.
Finally
, Food can
also
 be genetically modified by the use of different
machines
,
this
 of
machines
.
Nevertheless
, the positive aspects outweigh the disadvantages.
Machines
 are necessary in today’s hectic world and must be continued to be used to save
time
 means that
people
 have more
time
 to relax and enjoy everything without worrying about the season of certain fruits and vegetables arrive.
On the other hand
, a few detrimental effects are evident from the use of
machines
 for domestic purposes.
Initially
, it makes
people
 lethargic by giving them the choice of putting even the most trivial matters to
machines
. A sedentary lifestyle has become one way of living which leads to obesity and other health-related issues.
Moreover
, as
machines
 can wash clothes, prepare food conveniently, and assist in cleaning,
people
 are obsessed and they rely heavily on their potential. To conclude, I firmly believe that there are some inevitable drawbacks and energy.
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