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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 have different views
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 universities should make room for the best
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marks or approve all
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 who have ever studied badly at school. While a number of
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 believe that
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good
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 are better, I would argue that the rest of
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people
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the people
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 should be enrolled. On the one hand, there are various compelling reasons why
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good
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 should be admitted
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 universities.
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, these
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 have a large knowledge
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 their majors.
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 their subjects and schools can create
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outstanding graduates.
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,
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excellent
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 could bring a host of benefits to schools. For
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, after graduating,
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 may come back
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 where they have ever learnt so as to serve
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school
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 teaching.
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, I would side with those who believe that all ages
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admired
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 the right to study.
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 they are not good at some majors, they have progressive spirits. Another reason is that the patient
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excellent
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, I still agree with those who think that a

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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