Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or a health club, while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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of
people
advocate that the best way to stay fit is to go to a
gym
or a
health
club
, whereas others
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believe
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belive
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believe
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doing everyday
activities
such
as walking and climbing is enough. I personally agree with
second
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statement since it is not only one way to
going
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go
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to a
gym
or a
health
club
for
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to
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fit
.
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off
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all,
stay
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staying
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fit
one
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of the
important
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most important
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things
of
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every person. Because when
people
stay fit they feel
themselves
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apply
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much better. Good emotions
depends
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depend
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by
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on
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good
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a good
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fit. Going to a
gym
or a
health
club
good decision for change.
For instance
, at the
gym
people
can see
quickly
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changes
on
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in
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their
body
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bodies
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. Because they spend many affords to get
good
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a good
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body.
However
,
people
cannot
going
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go
be going
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to a
gym
or a
health
club
since is enough to just
walking
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walk
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or
climbing
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climb
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. Every physical
activities
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activity
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can give
people
good
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a good
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fit.
Also
one of the most important aspects is food. If
people
eat healthy food, they will be healthy.
In addition
.
such
as
activities
as
gym
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a gym
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can give bad effect on
people
health
. Because
people
spend a lot of energy
to
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on
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this
gym
.
Thus
, they can give rest to their body.
People
also
can hurt something at the
gym
. Because there are many dangerous things. In
conclude
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conclusion
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, doing everyday
activities
such
as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. Because it
also
guess
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as
activities
. Every
activities
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activity
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can help
people
with their
fit
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fitness
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.
In addition
, hea;thy food is too important for keep fit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cardiovascular health
  • resistance training
  • physical endurance
  • muscle tone
  • caloric expenditure
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivational factor
  • fitness regimen
  • holistic health
  • sustainable exercise habit
  • metabolic rate
  • physical exertion
  • exercise consistency
  • health maintenance
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