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Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #education #hunger #food #aid
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A number of
people
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 advocate that formation is
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addressing
hunger
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 worldwide whereas others believe that the answer is in
food
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 assistance. I personally believe that education can solve
hunger
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. Both sides will be discussed in
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 essay.
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 of all, starvation worldwide is one of the most important
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 of humanity since there are a lot of poor countries where
people
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 can't find
food
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.
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 residents of these countries die from famine. In order to help other countries in case of
hunger
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, there
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 to be a group of
people
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, who will help those in need. Governments should invest in a fund to help the hungry and help with all efforts.
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, the hungry will be reduced because they will be constantly helped by the authorities.
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,
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 aid and continued investment in the famine do not guarantee continued hungry.
People
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 will be provided with
food
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 from the authorities and from various foundations that help fight
hunger
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, but it doesn’t teach
people
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 to find
food
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.
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, education can give them
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 knowledge that will help to ensure them. As they say "give a man a fish and he will eat for a day, teach him how to fish and he will sit in a boat all day and drink beer". In
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conclusion
conlusion
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conclusion
, educating
people
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 can fight with hungry since they will have the knowledge that will help them provide for themselves. Providing
people
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 with
food
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 is good, but
people
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 have to learn to add
food
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 themselves.
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