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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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There has been a significant divergence of opinion revolving around whether
that
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computers
 have positive effects on education, while others think
computers
 will hurt
students
.
However
,
computers
 more convenient to learn something.
Therefore
,
i
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 firmly support the previous notion. Nowadays, education became more flexible and versatile. There are different learning methods that help you learn the lesson faster. So there are
computers
 that help with learning, but many
students
 can not control their time on the
computer
and
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 spoil their health. So learning without a
computer
 will be healthy and will not cause any dependency.
Also
, non-
computer
 learning can develop
students
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 creativity and intelligence
However
,
however
, books and other teaching methods can not give
such
 progress as the
computer
.
Although
the
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computer
 has bad health effects and can become addictive
,
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 if teachers or parents control the
students
 will
much
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 smarter. Since the person can find any information
in
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 the
computer
. It is
also
 easier to learn by
computer
 because all information is easy to obtain and pupils spend less time.
For instance
, in our
school
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 we gave the assignment to make a presentation to one group given to make a presentation on paper and another group on the
computer
. the group that made the presentation on the
computer
 showed more different information. To conclude,
computer
 training is more versatile and more convenient than without a
computer
.
However
, people should monitor sitting at the
computer
. Because there could be negative health consequences from being on the
computer
 for a long time.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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