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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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health
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 is crucial to every country. It is argued that free medical
services
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 should be free to the masses, whether or not the newest medical supplies are, expensive to be made available.
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government
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 should provide citizens with
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health
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services
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. In the
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 place, just the proper care can save
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millions
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 from dying.
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, if the current trend of free treatment is well managed, with
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regular patient
follow up
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, allowing a desirable outcome, there will not be a need to purchase expensive supplies in the
health
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 facilities and we can save several
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people
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 lives.
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, free medical
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 will help reduce cases of illnesses aggravating. Most serious illnesses are managed with high-priced drugs.
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, if patients can obtain free access to untied
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, they can easily get themselves treated before their
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 become worse. For
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 control should be free. What is more, it is undeniable that
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 every province
to provide
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 a free medical facility is a significant way to predict
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health-related
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health related
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 issues. It's a good approach to overcome
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health related
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 challenges and make
people
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appeals
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 healthy.
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, beggarly
people
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 daily facing
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 challenges even
they
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 don't know how to become well.
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, India
provide
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 free medical checkups supplying insurance policies in Canada, which has free medical for all diseases and diagnosis. To conclude, despite the financial circumstances government contribute
medical
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services
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, but not fully. If government overcome the challenges and impart
medical
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 fully, it will be helpful for all poor and middle-class
people
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