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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

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Rise in criminal activities especially, in urban areas by the young population throughout the globe.
This
 essay below will discuss the main reason behind it along with its solution.
To begin
 with, inflation and lack of job opportunities are the main reasons which compel youngsters to do illegal activities. Due to the lack of money, they can't buy things for themselves and inflation in the market gives them an extra burden to survive so in turn, they commit to
such
 enterprises. To exemplify, poaching of one-horn rhinoceros in Chitwan National Park of Nepal happens quite frequently by the same types of groups in order to earn money by selling it in the international market.
Moreover
, in order to sort out
such
 issues government should create ample employment opportunities along with strict rules and regulations against criminal activities. Once they start working and earning by themselves, they will no longer involve in
such
 things.
Similarly
, awareness about the worst penalty will keep them far.
For example
, the crime rate in the UK is comparatively less than in other countries due to the easy availability of work and tough laws against illegitimate action. In conclusion, unlawful acts are growing widely among youngsters in developed areas around the globe due to the heavy unemployment ratio and increment of prices in the market.
However
,
this
 can get mitigated by creating job facilities and adherent constitutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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