In many countries, people wear more western-style clothes (suits and jeans) than their traditional clothes. Why? It is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, people dress in Western-style more and more. I wholeheartedly believe that
this
trend should be changed
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because people will forget their traditional values.
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situation and the negative aspects of the blind
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pursuit
persuit
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pursuit
of
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. People love to wear modern dresses
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because they are trendy and comfortable. Social media posts, news and movies are always showing individuals who are wearing skinny jeans, shorts and beautiful fashionable garments.
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, these days, numerous shopping malls are selling modern
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clothes rather than
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suits.
Although
the introduction of
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clothing may help to improve our fashion, it will lead to the loss of our cultural identity.
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, folks who are always dressed in
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clothing do not like national vestments,
as a result
, they move away from nationalism. In my opinion, every culture has its own uniqueness and the way we dress reflects our uniqueness.
For example
, in our
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many women wore satin dresses during
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holiday.
However
, now
such
garbs are neglected
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because the status of European apparel has increased all over the world. As an effect, folks cannot remember what their grandparents wore a century ago.
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that their patriotism and national identity may be at great risk. In conclusion,
although
most of the population around the globe has begun to adopt English
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brands. I argue that the negative effects of
this
growing trend are much more than the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Influence
  • Perception
  • Modern
  • Trendy
  • Practicality
  • Comfort
  • Professionalism
  • Integration
  • Global economy
  • Cultural identity
  • Appreciation
  • Preservation
  • Individual expression
  • Freedom of choice
  • Positive
  • Negative
  • Impacts
  • Local industries
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