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Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs regardless of their level of academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#everybody #admission #university #college #programs #level #ability
There is no doubt that university admission processes as a whole have become more
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competitive
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competitive
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recent years, with many still being rejected despite their astounding and
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 achievements and qualifications. I believe that education is a basic, mandatory human right that everybody should have access to up until
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high school
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highschool
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Although
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controversial
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 do not think college is a requirement and
hence
, it would naturally have stricter, more selective rules applied to it. Logically speaking, it would not be possible to admit all applicants regardless of their grades or other qualifications as there is a maximum number of
students
 a college can accept and there would be no true basis on which they can reject
students
.
Moreover
, since the university would have nothing to base the applicants on, they cannot cater to them the best they could by identifying their weaknesses and talents.
In addition
, some courses are very academically rigorous and require a strong foundation in pre-existing knowledge.
On the other hand
, I acknowledge the
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 standards to which some universities
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uphold
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 about
students
 putting tremendous pressure on themselves to exceed and
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 so, but still getting rejected, with
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 being especially prevalent among international
students
 planning on studying abroad.
This
 along with many other factors
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 has caused many
students
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 a higher degree leading to them not finding well-paying jobs on many occasions.
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