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Some cities ban private cars from entering the centre and force people to use bicycles and buses. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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Several urban areas forbid identity transports from entrancing the downtown and pressure individuals to utelize motorbice and autobus. Nowadays one of the widely discussed issues is transports . It is undeniable that it has become an integral part of our life. From my point of view , it has more pros than cons , but it
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 has disadvantages. In
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 essay, I will examine both advantages and disadvantages conversational issue. There are a number of significant benefits that it helps to decrease rate of accident ,because of , a lot of
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 disaster caused by transports. Take
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: according to statistics on the world. Almost all accidents are caused by
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. Another advantage is that banning many
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 from entering the
city
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 will go a long way in reducing ambient
noise
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 in areas where car
noise
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 is increasing.
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 of
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,
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 helps them a lot. Turning to the other side of the argument is that
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 of the large number of
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, it causes great damage to the environment.
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 : according to research conducted by environmental scientists, one of the biggest factors of environmental pollution is the toxic gases emitted by vehicles.
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 to that it causes a lot of traffic. Take as an example the country of Singapore because
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 country increased the tax on
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 in order to prevent traffic jams.
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, the number of
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 in the nation is low and vehicles can move freely on
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 streets. In conclution, having weighed everything mentained up, I can come to a conclution that banning private
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 from entering the
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 will help reduce accidents and prevent
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 around the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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