Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Convenience food and beverages are increasingly becoming popular

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. The high

sugar

level

in these

products

can have adverse

effects

on

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health which result in some diseases

such

as diabetes and obesity. The opponents argue there should be a significant rise in the price of them due to prevent people from consuming them. In my view, I entirely agree with

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perspective and the following paragraphs examine the reasons provided to support

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thesis. The

first

and foremost impact of sugary

products

is on health. High

level

of

sugar

is not healthy for

body

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and leads to several disease

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from mild to severe issues. Diabetes and obesity are the two common illnesses as a direct effect of sweet foods and drinks

especially

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in children who are not aware of these harmful

products

.

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, youngsters will be easily tempted to consume

these food

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because of the false advertisement and

effects

of their peers.

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, rule makers should make more taxes on these foods in order to make a substantial decrease in purchasing these drinks. Another important reason for reducing

consumption

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of these

products

is their

effects

on

brain

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. The research

suggest

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that excess

sugar

might damage

brain

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. It may cause one

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poorer memory and smaller brain volume overall.

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, dementia might be developed in those who consumed

high

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level

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of

sugar

compared to those who did not. Some other research demonstrates that

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depression might be another cause of

sugar

consumption. Altogether, while there

are

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still

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of solid evidence, the initial research has found some connections between

high

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level

of

sugar

and mental health. In brief, the excess amount of

sugar

has a huge influence on physical and mental illnesses namely diabetes and dementia, respectively.

Therefore

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policymakers

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policy makers

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are responsible and need to take action

such

as increasing tax

amount

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and prohibiting sales of these drinks to people who are not aware of the adverse

effects

such

as children and adolescents.