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governement should spend money on railways more than roads

#governement #money #railways #roads
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 with the past, methods of transport are completely changed in every corner of the world. Some people believed that the city council of each country should pay more attention and spend more money on
railways
 than
roads
. I support
this
 view for one major reason.
First
, the great advantage of spending more budget on
railways
 is reduced air pollution.
On the other hand
, when your
invest
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 to add more stations and amend old
railways
 for covering more locations,
then
 people use public transportation
instead
 of using private cars as much as before.
Therefore
, we don't have any traffic so air pollution is decreasing.
secondly
, because of don't have any
traffics
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, the population can go to where the place that they want as much sooner as before so they can save time and good life.
On the other hand
, some people believed that government should invest money in
roads
.
Firstly
,
roads
 are much
useful
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 than
railways
. Society uses private cars and
roads
 to commute and go someplace. But if
government
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the government
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 make more station in every location, the crowd don't need to use
the
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car to go to some special places. In conclusion, the government try to make a good life for residents and I think for
this
 issue it's good to spend more money on
railways
 than
roads
.
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