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Some people think that news has no connection with people’s lives; so it is a waste of time to read newspapers and watch television news programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are controversial opinions among the public about whether the
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 is beneficial to our life or not. In my opinion,
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 and media are two crucial aspects of human society. A small number of people suppose that
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 useless to keep oneself up to date with the
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 due to the fact that knowing what is out there doesn't really help much in changing one's living conditions. Some even state that it is distracting to be instantly informed about the incidents that happen around them.
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, my 25 years old friend once said his mood for the whole day was brought down by just a small morning newsletter about a case of some young teenagers committing suicide. He wished he wouldn't
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read that piece of
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 so early in the morning that day.
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, I personally see
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 as a tiny side effect of
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 to some individuals. In some ways,
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 and media contribute greatly to personal development as well as society.
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 about technological advancements or human achievements in the social and science fields plays an important role in setting motions to ideas and revolutions within each person.
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, whenever I see any articles about a famous researcher's scientific finding or a story of a great philanthropist in underdeveloped
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, I suddenly feel a fire of desire to go out there and make some positive change to
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 world. In conclusion, it is undeniable that
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 can have some negative effects on people's moods.
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, one should be aware of what it is around them to decide on an appropriate living attitude so as to self-reflect and make proper modifications for self-development
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