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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course. Write a letter to your teachers. In your letter describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ................. ,

#minutes #job #course #teachers #situation #time #action #addresses
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that I will not be able to participate in the evening classes of English hereafter in weekend evenings.
Last
 week one of my
teammate
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met with a tragedic accident and he will not be able to come to
work
 in
next
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 few months.
Hence
, I have to cover up his
work
 of him,
otherwise
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 a replacement would cost him his job. We both are working on a construction project and it is required to complete within the
next
 two months. At the moment, we are at final testing and commissioning
work
 and without my
partner
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 I was asked to
work
 until late at night.
Hence
, I will not be able to attend my part-time classes on weekday evenings.
However
, since I am allowed to take a break on Sundays, I wonder whether is it possible for me to transfer myself
for
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 weekend classes so I could continue it until the end. Please kindly note that I am very much interested in
this
 amazing course since it will definitely help me to obtain an opportunity in a multi-national organization. I am looking forward to hearing a favourable reply from you.
Also
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 I truly feel sorry for the inconvenience caused. Yours faithfully, Alex Student ID: 202039
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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