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Home schooling is getting a lot importance over traditional learning environment provided by schools. What is your opinion on the subject?

#home #importance #environment #schools
Whether, teaching areas as a public region provided by academies like study rooms, laboratories and classrooms have more advantages for
education
 or collaboration family at home is playing a major role,
furthermore
, teachers and parents have alleged together in
this
 regard, and due to
this
, I am going to explore both sides for clarifying which is better for society. In a beginning, libraries as a part of academic institutions are playing a major role in better performance of people in their academic
education
,
in addition
, classrooms and laboratories have been designed to ignite a sense of curiosity in
students
 who will be able to raise their own problem-solving ability,
for example
, Harvard University which is located at US and known as a well-known institution around the world has been constructed by many classic areas to push the motivation of their individuals, while, it has understood if there are not well-designated decorates for the campus, reduction in performance of
students
 will not unexpected.
Although
, others opine
students
 must be overwhelmed in their life,
in particular
, at the locations will spend a large amount of their own time,
consequently
, it would seem homes are an essential part of
education
, due to
this
 fact, many countries have balanced study tasks between classrooms and homework, while, Japan as a great country in the educational system has forbidden studying at home for primary levels, but, in secondary schools,
students
 have allowed doing their own tasks at home,
as a result
, speculating on the importance of academic spaces in comparison private space is a controversial topic that has not been well investigated. In conclusion, in my point of view, private spaces must be specified for kids indirectly regarding
education
,
on the contrary
, completing tasks must prevent outside of schools, alongside, a higher level of
education
 need
to
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an ancient type of buildings
such
 as laboratories and libraries.
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