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Some people say that watching TV programmes and movies related to crime are popular. Why do you think it is popular and how does it affect society?

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I live in a compact
city
. There are 800 000 people locals, and about 200 000 are work immigrants. The
city
 is well-run because of smart officials, so we have spotless streets, safe and secure roads and districts. We
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don't
dont
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don't
 have no muggings
in
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downtown, but
i
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 would recommend
to stay
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 alert in suburbs. The suburbs are sprawling^ and as a matter of fact
its
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 pretty congested in rush
ours
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. The traffic crawls like a snail. But the buses run smoothly because of their personal line on the roads. The
city
 is not chaotic at all, we have a dash
on
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 each crossroad and road control by the police. We have some plants around the
city
: metal, gas and oil industry,
thats
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that's
 why some of our suburbs are very polluted. If you stay there for a while you would choke. From time to time you can meet 1-2
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 run-down buildings made of wood. In the past,
about
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 100 years there were
a
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private houses of famous traders, but now they are
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 memorials protected by federal law and condemned to be renovated. Living here you can feel an affluent vibe
especially
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in
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a night time. The streets became a showroom of
brand new
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 bikes and autos. People are showing off to each other)) We have a very polar climate, so
its
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 a cold winter, warm summer and humid autumn and spring.
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