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a- Would you consider being a vlogger or blogger? b- What type of blogs or vlogs do you like to watch/read? c- Do you think blogging/vlogging is a challenging work?

#a- #vlogger #blogger #b- #type #blogs #vlogs #c- #work
Nowadays, digital media is growing faster. As well as people are
also
 using it
for
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 entertain themself. In my daily
life
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 I am
also
 using it.
Such
 as watching youtube videoes, surfing
internet
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,
spend
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 some time on social media
application
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 and so on. But
most
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 time
i
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 would like to spend videoes which is related to vlogging
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especially
espacially
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especially
food
 vlogging videos are very entertaining for me. I would not to
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being
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bring
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 any type of
vlogger
 or blogger. Because of being a
vlogger
 is very hard to manage personal life.
Moreover
, we need to give much time to handle our social media platform to entertain our audience.
For example
, if
sometime
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 we
not
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do not
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 upload our content regularly so there is a chance to
loose
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 our
follower
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followers
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. In my point of view, I would like to watch
food
vlogging related
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vlogging-related
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 content. As my nature is
foodie
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a foodie
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 as well as I like to explore other cities famous
food
 dishes not only that, I
also
want
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 know about multi
cousine
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cuisine
 and continental
food
 dishes of the world.
On the other hand
, there is
also
have
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some negative aspect of being
food
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a food
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vlogger
 or blogger.
Firstly
,
Vlogger
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 have sufficient
fund
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funds
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 to
bare
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bear
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expenses
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the expenses
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 of
food
 exploration.
Furthermore
, Once we being famous it is hard to handle our personal life.
For instance
, a famous person can not go outside where they want to go since
audience
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 asking for videos, selfies and much more. To sum up, being
vlogger
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a vlogger
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 or blogger is not
a
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 easy task. So
i
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I
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 would like to suggest that, we can enjoy all things without being
a
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famous personality.
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