Some people say that watching TV programmes and movies related to crime are popular. Why do you think it is popular and how does it affect society?

These days dyas television and
movies
programme
are becoming more and more popular in
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society
and
people
now prefer to watch programmes that are related to
crime
.
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In our ,
society
today
crime
has increased so much that it has caused more problems in our
society
it has turned some societies from good to bad and
people
have started making use of guns due to
crime
and the view of what they watch in
movies
and making the
children's
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start learning how to make use of
a bad weapons
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.
firstly
in today's activities
crime
has developed so much that insecurity has become our daily news
as a result
of
crime
so,
therefore
,
therefore
people
prefer to watch what is happening in
society
in other to prevent themselves in
society
. ,
secondly
due to
crime
in ,
society
people
now watching
movies
related to
crime
are now becoming more populated to compare to
movies
to teach about other things
for example
talk of Ukraine and the Russian war which have resulted in killing and have caused
the
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serious effects on the world. so,
therefore
,
therefore
people
now watch more and view the channels related to
the
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crime
to learn more about how to prevent themselves.adult who is watching
this
programme
have
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an advantage compared to
children
and
crime
can be seriously stopped in
society
if the government put
an
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other from viewing the
programme
and showing erotic
movies
and news which is causing more
crime
and making the societies focus more on the watching of those programmes and stop
crime
in the
society
.it will help bring the peace in the
society
. In these ,case adult gains more from watching the
programme
to know how to secure they self which
this
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is a very serious disadvantage where our
children
. to sum ,
up
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crime
have caused more effects on our
teenagers
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society
and adults have learned a lot from watching programmes and
movies
.and it can be prevented by not viewing all the
crime
channels and related movie on
children
.
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