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Some people say that watching TV programmes and movies related to crime are popular. Why do you think it is popular and how does it affect society?

#people #tv #programmes #movies #crime #society
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These days dyas television and
movies
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programme
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 are becoming more and more popular in
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society
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 and
people
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 now prefer to watch programmes that are related to
crime
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society
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 today
crime
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 has increased so much that it has caused more problems in our
society
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 it has turned some societies from good to bad and
people
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 have started making use of guns due to
crime
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 and the view of what they watch in
movies
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 and making the
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children's
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 start learning how to make use of
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 in today's activities
crime
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 has developed so much that insecurity has become our daily news
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 of
crime
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 so,
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people
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 prefer to watch what is happening in
society
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 in other to prevent themselves in
society
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 due to
crime
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 in ,
society
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people
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 now watching
movies
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 related to
crime
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 are now becoming more populated to compare to
movies
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 to teach about other things
for example
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 talk of Ukraine and the Russian war which have resulted in killing and have caused
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serious effects on the world. so,
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people
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 now watch more and view the channels related to
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crime
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 to learn more about how to prevent themselves.adult who is watching
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programme
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have
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 an advantage compared to
children
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 and
crime
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 can be seriously stopped in
society
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 if the government put
an
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other from viewing the
programme
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 and showing erotic
movies
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 and news which is causing more
crime
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 and making the societies focus more on the watching of those programmes and stop
crime
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 in the
society
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.it will help bring the peace in the
society
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. In these ,case adult gains more from watching the
programme
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 to know how to secure they self which
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is a very serious disadvantage where our
children
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. to sum ,
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crime
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 have caused more effects on our
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society
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 and adults have learned a lot from watching programmes and
movies
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.and it can be prevented by not viewing all the
crime
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 channels and related movie on
children
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