Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society.

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modern era, it is considered that social
media
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deeply influenced
society
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. Some people argue that social sites and
apps
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have negatively affected
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as well as
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an individual
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individual
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while
other
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oppose
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. I would like to give my own view
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heated argument; everyone had
negative
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a negative
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impact
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social applications.
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technology
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era and a person who is not using digital
media
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is not able to compete with
society
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. Using social
apps
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are
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also
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a need
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need
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of
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time, as all the business and official deals are done via different
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.
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, official meetings and transactions are
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executed by using
different
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a different
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online
app
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apps
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.
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, in Pakistan at
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all the administrative work is managed and updated by using
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SIS app. By keeping
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advantages every field is launching its own
apps
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to work efficiently.
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, excessive
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of anything is bad for health.
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Over
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use
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of social
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has made people
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addicted
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addicted
.
Public
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is more
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due to
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use
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of mobile phones and
latest
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technology.
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human
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the human
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does not like to spend leisure time with each other. Rather than spending their time
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playing online games and making videos on Tiktok, people should enjoy
company
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the company
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of their fellows. To exemplify, a large number of users died every year due to selfies fever by accidents.
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trend should be banned and there should be moderate
use
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of social
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. In conclusion, it is needless to say social
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is part of our lives. Advancement of technology has made our lives much easier and cheaper than earlier and
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of new
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is
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thriving which is
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beneficial for us. Meanwhile, extra
use
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of social
media
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is
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having
bad
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a bad
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affect
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effect
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on
society
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, which should be minimized to some level.
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