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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
A group of
people
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 opine that
aquawring
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acquiring
 knowledge about other
countries
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languages
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 only for tourism and work only. while some
other
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others
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 think that not only
that
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 two
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, but
also
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 so many other
causes
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people
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 learn foreign
languages
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 I will discuss both
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back up
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 my view.
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 of all, most
of
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the
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people
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foreign
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a foreign
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language
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for
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to
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 visit
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others
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other
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countries
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, because during
visit
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the visit
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 they have to communicate different places for their visit purposes, or when they know their
language
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, which
help
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 to solve many problems.
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, a significant number of Chinese
people
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 don't know other
languages
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, so
that
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visitors
in
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to
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 China musk have to know their
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 for communication,
otherwise
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 hair
a interpreters
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interpreters
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.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, a group of
people
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 learn
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others
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other
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countries
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countries'
country's
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language
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 for their work, because they exchange their information different purposes.
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, discrete
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countries
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country
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 ambassadors learn
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others
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others'
other's
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language
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 for building
excellent
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an excellent
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relationship
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relationships
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 with other
countries
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,
even
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and even
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 business
causes
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human
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humans
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learn
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to learn
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others
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others'
other's
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language
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 to sell their products.
Body paragraph 3
However
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,a large proportion of
people
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 learn
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others
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language
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 for their study purposes. many students pursue their higher education
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in others
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others
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other
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country's
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countries
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 and their classes
held
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are held
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on
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in
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 different
languages
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,
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,
Asian
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in Asian
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countries
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 mother
language
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 is not English but when they go to
USA
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the USA
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 for their higher education they are compulsory to learn
English
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the English
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language
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.
Body paragraph 4
Moreover
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, many students study
language
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 analysis,
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as
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and as
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 a result, they learn
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others
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other languages
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language
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 to improve their knowledge and good results.
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,
Dhaka
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a Dhaka
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University
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University's
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 group of students learn
other
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another language
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language
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, because they have to go
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to
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ancent
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ancient
 Palace to invent something new.
Conclusion
in conclusion, it is obvious that now globalisation human
learn
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language
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 varieties of
causes
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beside of
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 tour and work,
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however
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 from today context latter proposition are gaining more popularity and utility.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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