Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country. Others think that they should live in a separate minority group with different lifestyle. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

It is quite easier to understand that people who
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moving to a new
country
should accept
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culture
in the
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foreign
foeriegn
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foreign
country
.
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their
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is a
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that said that if you move to Rome you act like them,which means that moving from your own
country
and going to another
country
where they have different cultures ,languages,religion and different understanding and
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different
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skin.
Firstly
in my own view of
culture
,
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different cultures which means that moving from your own
country
to another
country
which
have
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resulted that
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are
acquring
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acquiring
acquire
another
culture
and
actitude
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attitude
.countries have different cultures that
one
have to change and start acting like them to maintain the
culture
of the
country
. Talk of language
for example
Nigeria my
country
have different
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and different languages but it does not mean that moving from your region to another region that does not mean that you will start behaving like them as well is a matter of choice.in
this
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one
can learn the
country
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language and be
actting
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acting
like them. religion most countries are
christian
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Christian
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while
another
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countries are
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Muslims
muslems
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Muslims
in
this
case when a
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is moving to
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Muslim
muslem
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a muslem
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country
that
doent
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doesn't
don't
mean
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you start acting like them,
one
can
qually
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equally
obey their rules and regulation governing the
country
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for example
talk for football is
one
thing that
bring
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the world
togrther
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together
whether
christian
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Christian
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or
muslem
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Muslim
. and for does who believe that moving to another
country
and
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in a
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separate
seperate
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separate
minority
have
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a lot to
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by
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separating
seperating
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separating
from
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society. In conclusion,
i
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believe
that is
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a quiet
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quiet
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quite
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understanding
that is
good for
moving
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move
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to another
country
to respect and understand the language of the
country
.
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