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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Agree or disagree

#people #money #roads #motorways #transport #systems
Thinking of spending
money
 on
road
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roads
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,
motorways
 and as well spending
money
 on public transport
system
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systems
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 is equally the same which means that you can as well spend
money
 at any point even on the
road
 or motorway and public transport system. In my own point of ,view it is well understood
that is
 quite easy for
one
 to
spending
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spend
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money
 on the
road
for example
 in my country whereby we move with cash and the automated card is possible to afford
whateverwhatever
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whatever whatever
 is needed to purchase what is valuable on the
road
.
for
instance
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 for
motorways
 it has resulted that
one
 can be driving I decided to park and spend
money
 .but in the case of a public transportation system is very different
that is
 possible not to spend
money
 because you don't have your own time to get what your want,it is that once the vehicle left the park won't be chanced to spend
money
..so,
therefore
,
therefore
 does that use public transport spend lesser
money
 getting what they need to compare to does on the
road
 and as well does on
motorways
 . In ,
conclusion
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the conclusion
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 is quite
understand
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understandable
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 that
one
 can spend
money
 at any given point,so
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, therefore,
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therefore
 I totally agree
that is
 possible for
one
 to spend
money
 on the
road
 ,
motorways
 and public transportation is different.
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