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in the future all cars,buses and trucks will be driverless.The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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Living in a sophisticated
world
 of technology, some
people
 argue that all
vehicles
 including
cars
, buses and trucks will be completely
driverless
 in the near future. As a ,result the only
people
 commuting inside these
vehicles
 will be passengers. I strongly believe that the advantages of
driverless
vehicles
 outweigh their disadvantages,
,
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however
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 there are certain points that must be taken into account These days with the advent of new technologies we must do our bests to reap the benefits of living in a modern
world
 by using new inventions and trying to develop them in the best possible way. In terms of
driverless
vehicles
, providing that they are perfectly safe and secure, can play an important role in enhancing public welfare.
This
 invention exerts tremendous benefit on those
people
, suffering from a disability. Some disabled
people
 have isolated themselves from society
as a result
 of their physical problems
driverless
cars
 can help them to get back to social lives by bringing independence and self-confidence to them. Not only can
driverless
cars
 help disabled
people
 but
also
 it can have a great effect on other
people
 as they can use their time effectively rather than driving toward their destination. Reading books, checking emails, eating or simply relaxing and enjoying the picturesque scenes around them are typical examples to illustrate the point. Today's
world
 has gone dramatic changes and our
world
 is characterized by new inventions all of which can pose a significant role in addressing various issues in our lives. One of which is
driverless
cars
,
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however
 it is of great importance to pay a great deal of attention to these newly invented technologies to be sure about all their features and programs and to be sure that the so-called machine can make the best decision in exotic situations. In conclusion so eye-catching is
this
 newly invented technology that made it
hard
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 to underestimate its advantages and I entirely hold the view that its advantages outweigh its disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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