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Many people believe that formal "pen and paper"examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

#people #pen #paper #examinations #method #achievement #disagree？
Nowadays people believe that conventional writing-education based is the most reliable method in
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 educational achievements. I strongly disagree with
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 determined by several reasons.
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 era,
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 youngsters,who are ambitious and willing to climb the ladder of their career, need to enhance
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 practical skills,which helps them to gain practical and theoretical knowledge of
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. In the majority
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 computer is one major factor,
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computers,help to consolidate the knowledge they obtained during the classes.
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internet,
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 information with vivid pictures rather than profound papers, which may help some students to memorize the information easier. One more important reason is having the possibility to type their
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homework
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 learners to gain more time for their
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 activities. The syllabus in
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different
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 strain and stress among teens, thanks to
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 the apps that exist. In conclusion,
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 there are people that claim that the traditional way of learning, by writing with pen and paper,
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is the most suitable, because it is the backbone of
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education,
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 still believe that
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 generation should
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 play the role of new technology.
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