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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Students
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 are the greatest gift for the stability of the world economy. In ,schools there are
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 who are having myriads of
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.
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, some ,individuals think that
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 should be divided into classes according to their
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 some have academic
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 in one class and other in another. The following essay will elaborate on both of the opinions and I will provide mine in the latter part of the paragraphs with examples. It is evident, that in the majority of the schools separate academic ability
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 and educators think that they are god-gifted
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 and they have inborn talents. In despite, dividing the
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 provides them with a vast area of education facilities since they absorb knowledge more easily rather than other
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, which
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 will enhance their academic grades. As an example, a recent study shows that splitting out youngsters in schools allows teachers to customise educational content to align better with
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,
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 grouping according to their pedagogical
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 creates inhibits learning opportunities for some
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.
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, I believe that
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 should not be grouped based on their
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, every child has to stay in one class so that
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 who have poor performance in studies will develop their
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 by learning from
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 who are developed with
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.
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, educating youngsters separately will affect their mental health, as they get a feeling that they have been neglected by educators, and as a
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repercussion
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 eventually leads to poor performance in studies. To exemplify, in New Zealand number of
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 are prone to affective disorders
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 as anxiety and depression
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 of the poor education system provided to them in separated classes.
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, all
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 have the right to be a part of their classes without separation and with ,
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 they develop a sense of belonging and become better prepared. To conclude, I believe that
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 should be educated equally based on their rights because
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 helps
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 to develop their educational
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 and move away from trauma, even though there are
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 who have better academic
skills
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