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celebritese should major issue are you aggre or disaggree

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It has been a tradition for years for famous
people
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 to talk about the significant issues in their country. I disagree with
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 issue as well as agree with it, because I think they are trying to help
people
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 make good decisions, but
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, they negatively affect
people
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's decisions.
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, celebrities can help to illustrate the attention to some issues in a country that ordinary
family
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families
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 cannot get to other countries.
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, in my
provincial
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,
people
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 have many problems and ordinary
family
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families
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 cannot talk about them and tell the world that they need help. These folk can help spread information and act as a voice for the
people
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 in my country.
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, they encourage folk to do humanitarian work.
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, during the pandemic celebrities helped
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 continue their lives because of the lockdown.
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,
people
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 that have fame can influence folks to make the rung decision. Namely, when election time comes in a
provincial
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, these
population
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 promote the person they want and make
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 follow their opinion, even though we do not know if
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 decision is really right or not. Alternatively, some of these
community
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communities
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 try to show folk more than they are and want
population
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the population
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 to follow them because they are always right. In conclusion, I cannot definitely say that I agree or disagree with the involvement of celebrities in the main issues because of the reasons I have stated above. and whether their intervention is 100% useful or not.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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