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Television has diminished the free time of people. It can make people lazy and not socialize with others. Do you agree or disagree?

#television #time #people
Since
last
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the last
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 few decades, television has been the main source of entertainment for everyone. While many
people
 use it to relax or enjoy
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it during
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during
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their free
time
, others believe that it has eaten up
the
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their
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 free
time
 of
people
 and has made them lethargic. I wholeheartedly agree with the latter one, and
this
 essay will elaborate on why it has diminished
the
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free
time
 and how it is making
people
 lazy. In recent times, television has become an addiction for almost everyone. In
this
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fast-moving
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fast moving
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fast-moving
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 and hectic life, everybody looks for a quick source of entertainment which is provided by the
televisions
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television
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. Over a period of
time
,
people
 get connected with the content being consumed and do not even realize that they spend almost all of their free
time
 in front of it. It has become a vicious cycle that the more they consume,
more
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 will be their addiction to stick to their screens, which leaves no
time
 for their family or
the
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personal hobbies.
Furthermore
, with the introduction of over-the-top content from the platforms like Netflix,
people
 have reduced socializing which is making
people
 lazy. Earlier,
for instance
,
people
 used to go out on weekends to enjoy
with
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themselves with
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 their family and friends,
however
, now everyone is
leaned
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leaning
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 toward the culture of
binge watching
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binge-watching
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 where they complete the whole series of content in a single go.
This
 has led to various mental health concerns like stress and anxiety, which
subsequently
also
results
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result
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 in lethargic behaviour. In conclusion, just like any other thing in
this
 world, television has its own boons and banes. If it is consumed for a limited period of
time
, it could be
a
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 excellent source of entertainment,
however
, its
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prolonged
prolongued
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prolonged
 use can be very dangerous and may negatively impact one's quality of life.
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