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Some people think the best way to stay fit is joining a gym/helath club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Before drawing conclusions about
such
 a measure as an increase in the price of fuel used for any type of vehicle, it is necessary to indicate the most significant causes affecting the environment. Anyway, it should be noted, the emissions of substances from the combustion of refined products, gas and natural coal impact the oxygen-carbon balance of the air and the level of environmental pollution. It is well-known fact that the UN plans to introduce an ecological tax in 2030.
One
 way or another,
this
 mandatory payment will be five and a half thousand dollars for
one
 ton of carbon dioxide, which means about thirteen dollars for
one
 litre of petrol or diesel fuel. At the same time, it is worth thinking about the fact that humanity cannot abandon the current speed of movement and a busy lifestyle, which is why mankind will be forced to invent and put into active use new sources of energy.
However
, the idea of ecological personal tax duty is not very popular. A striking example of the demonstration and riots in France in 2018 against the increase in fuel prices due to environmental excise. Obviously, competent filing can serve as a significant reduction or abolition of the tax on production and humidity by electric transport. In
this
 case, the alternative for households will be obvious savings. Summing up, I would like to express my opinion, which is that when introducing restrictions on the consumption of
one
 resource, a reasonable alternative should always be offered,
for example
, in the form of affordable electricity prices or an expansion of options for comfortable public transport.
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