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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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recent years,
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overpopulation in the whole world has raised
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 issue of using
such
 unconventional
food
 as
insects
. Even though
this
 solution could potentially lead to solving famine in some under-developing countries, eating
insects
 may
also
 harm human health.
In addition
, insect farming to feed large masses of
population
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 might damage our environment. In my opinion, the disadvantages of using
insects
 as
food
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far outweigh
advantages
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. The reasons supporting
this
 opinion will be discussed below. To start with,
one
 evident disadvantage of eating
insects
 is
potential
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damages
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 to our health. Regardless
the
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 claims that
insects
 are rich
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 protein, vitamins and minerals, authoritarian and incontrovertible/ indisputable evidence supporting
this
 idea is yet to be discovered.
Furthermore
, the fact that
insects
 are arguably common
food
 in some Asian and African cultures, does not imply that they can become an integral part of other cuisines around the world. Being compatible with
one
 culture may not lead to the same result in another.
On the contrary
,
insects
 may cause serious issues as many kinds of bacteria that are known to make people sick have been found in them. Another possible hard is that
insects
 can be a choking hazard due to their hard parts which include stingers, wings, sharp mouthparts, and spines. These are paradoxically the main disadvantages of using
insects
 as
food
. Another clear challenge is related to an attempt to decrease
food
 shortages.
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 enough sustenance for big communities implies raising and breeding too many
insects
 and
this
 will inevitably affect the ecosystem. A significant increase in the number of
one
 type of species may cause a dramatic ecological imbalance in the flora and fauna and lead to
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 disappearance of certain animals and plants.
Thus
, a strive to decrease famine may result in
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 and drastic natural balance.
One
 possible benefit of eating
insects
 is that
insects
 require less care and upkeep than livestock.
Therefore
, they could be an easy solution to creating a sustainable global
food
 system in the wake of Covid-19. In conclusion, even though there are certain advantages of using
insects
 as a
food
 source, potential health problems and the
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 on the environment outweigh the advantages.
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