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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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recent years,
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overpopulation in the whole world has raised
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 solution could potentially lead to solving famine in some under-developing countries, eating
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 might damage our environment. In my opinion, the disadvantages of using
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far outweigh
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. The reasons supporting
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 evident disadvantage of eating
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damages
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 to our health. Regardless
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 claims that
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 are rich
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 protein, vitamins and minerals, authoritarian and incontrovertible/ indisputable evidence supporting
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 idea is yet to be discovered.
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, the fact that
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 are arguably common
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 in some Asian and African cultures, does not imply that they can become an integral part of other cuisines around the world. Being compatible with
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 culture may not lead to the same result in another.
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,
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 may cause serious issues as many kinds of bacteria that are known to make people sick have been found in them. Another possible hard is that
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 can be a choking hazard due to their hard parts which include stingers, wings, sharp mouthparts, and spines. These are paradoxically the main disadvantages of using
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 as
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. Another clear challenge is related to an attempt to decrease
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 shortages.
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 enough sustenance for big communities implies raising and breeding too many
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 will inevitably affect the ecosystem. A significant increase in the number of
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 type of species may cause a dramatic ecological imbalance in the flora and fauna and lead to
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 disappearance of certain animals and plants.
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 and drastic natural balance.
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 possible benefit of eating
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 is that
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 require less care and upkeep than livestock.
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, they could be an easy solution to creating a sustainable global
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 system in the wake of Covid-19. In conclusion, even though there are certain advantages of using
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 as a
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 source, potential health problems and the
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affect
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 on the environment outweigh the advantages.
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