Whether or not a person achieves their aims in life is mostly related to luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that the majority of
people
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believe
luck
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is the main ingredient of success.
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not everyone will side with me in
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regard, I entirely disagree with the statement. Those whose position is contrary to mine come up with a couple of reasons to justify the position they hold.
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and foremost, they believe that It is comfortable to think that everything depends on fortune.
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,
people
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believe in lotteries, and
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this kind
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of
things
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because It is
lifestyle
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their lifestyle
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of them.
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, I have a neighbour,
he
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who
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has passed his exam and
he
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studies at university,
however
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, he did not prepare for the exam but he has been successful.
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to
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, they argue that
luck
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and
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essential element as we can see everywhere how
people
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are achieving their goals without hard-working. Sometimes one lazy
person
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succeeds out of a hundred.
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, some
people
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see
this
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person
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and generalize the situation saying that everything depends on
luck
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. The majority of
people
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prefer to turn a blind eye to them. Even though I see their position, It is not solid enough to convince me that I am wrong. Turning to my opinion regarding the matter, I have three reasons for my substantiation.
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, a
person
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who works hard can achieve all their goals.
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, my brother loves working hard, and he attempts to do all the best things for everyone,
that is
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why he has everything.
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, If a
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waits for fortune, he will drastically lose
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everything. When you have a target you should
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them,
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and after
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that you can get it. The great writer Paulo Coelho said: " When you want something all the universe conspires in helping you achieve It."
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,
people
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should be realistic because they do not attention to
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hard to do the best things.After all,
luck
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is not realistic,
people
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ought to learn to earn money in their spheres since
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is life
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a toy! On the basis of everything that has been articulated, I confidently express my disagreement with the statement albeit, the
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of some.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • luck
  • determination
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • skills
  • continuous learning
  • achievements
  • opportunities
  • networking
  • personal accountability
  • diverse backgrounds
  • access to resources
  • causality
  • creative industries
  • structured fields
  • linear
  • predicated on merit
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