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Some people think that activities during the free-time should be planned while others disagree. Discuss both sides and include examples and relevant data from your own experience.

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The pie charts compare the percentage of males and females in full-time and part-time employment in 2012 as opposed to 1988 in the UK. Overall, it is clear from the graph that a lot of people were employed in the latter year as opposed to the former year. Again, full-time employment was by far the most popular employment category among men in the two distinct years, followed by part-time jobs among
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 in both years. The total number of
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 who were employed rose from 23,839,000 in 1988 to 29,600,000 in 2012. In 1988, a lot of men were employed fully with the
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 being 53%,
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 dropped in 2012, from
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 number to 47%. The
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 highest type of work was part-time job among
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 in 1988 when the UK experienced 22% of
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 out of its population working in a half-day job, but there was a slight decrease in the proportion of females in 2012,
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, while there was a decline in proportion, the total number saw an increase, from 5,268,000 folks to 5,979,000 folks in 1988 and 2012 respectively. From the graph, it is clear that there was a change in statistics among men who worked on an hourly basis,
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 6% in 1988 and an insignificant increase in 2012.
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 that saw a considerable increase was the percentage of
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 who worked full-time. From nearly one in five in 1988 to just above a quarter in 2012.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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