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Many people continiue to use cars and motorcycels even though they know that they are bad for the enviroment. Why is this? what can be done to reduce the use of these vehicels ?

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Despite the fact that
people
 are aware of the negative impacts of motor vehicles on the quality of air , that
people
 breathe, in large cities, their number is on the rise. I can assign two grounds to
this
 phenomenon. In
this
 essay, I will
also
 propose ways to cope with
this
 issue. There are some reasons why the community continue to
use
 private
cars
.
Initially
, the convenience of private
cars
 is not found in public
transport
. Because public transportation is time-consuming, when
people
 are
forwaiting
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for waiting
waiting
 the bus or train they waste time.
As a result
, between
two
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the two
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 options, private car and public
transport
, private
cars
 are wins.
Furthermore
, social investigations have shown that sixty per cent of
people
, who lives in metropolitans, feel better and safer in their
cars
 compared to public
transport
. ,
Subsequently
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 urban planning research over the cities
have
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has
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 demonstrated that a numerous number of
people
, who
use
 private
cars
, are living in the suburbs and
countrysides
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countryside
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.
Hence
, it would be difficult to
use
 public
transport
 to have
daily
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a daily
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trip
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trips
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 to job or shopping.
However
, the
use
 of private
cars
 and their exhaust fumes are many negative impacts on the environment, especially air quality. There is some solution to reduce
this
 inconvenience affects.
To begin
 with, steps must be taken by governments
such
 as considering high taxes for to
use
 of private
cars
except
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forexcept
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 someone who lives in suburbs.
Nonetheless
, implement some clarified financial plans to loan or credit to exchange old
cars
 with more environmentally friendly vehicles.
Besides
, regarding the technology advancements, electric bikes would be a promising solution, which needs to be promoted, for shorter distances in order to reduce the emissions of pollutant substances in the environment. In conclusion,
although
 the
use
 of private old
cars
 can cause some catastrophic damage to air quality, there
is
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 some novel solutions to decrease the effect
is
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mentioned above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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