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TASK1- Coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five cities in Australia

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The bar graph illustrates data from a study about the consumption and purchases of caffeinated beverages in five big towns in Australia for four weeks. Overall, it is clear that the majority of people in the given cities mostly enjoyed going to a café, except Adelaide, in which
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 seemed to be slightly more popular than café shop visits. The graph
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 states that fresh
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 buying was the least used option among the subjects in all five places. A significant proportion of the interviewed individuals attended café to acquire their desired cup of hot beverages. The highest percentages of consumers in
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 group were inhabitants of Hobart, Melbourne and Sydney at approximately 62 %, 63 % and 61 % respectively.
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, there was a small deviation in the general pattern as Adelaide´s café goers at around 49 % were overtaken by
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 drinkers at 50 %.
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, fresh and
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 customers were subjected to indisputable variations. Cities,
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 as Hobart where
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 usages were highest at just below 55 % had a lower proportion of fresh
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 intake at roughly 37 %. Another noticeable discovery was that the biggest difference between
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 purchases at around 53% and 34% respectively was observed in the city of Brisbane.
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