Governments should spend money to encourage the development of sport and art for school students rather than supporting professional sports and art performances for the public. Do you agree or disagree?

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encourage young people to leave
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think they should stay
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views and will give my opinion. For the
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without
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, must know that they cannot live with
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all life. Teenagers should search
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to leave from
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home
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start working or studying. But if
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does not show initiative, some
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start. Push
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to leave the house or kick out him. I think that
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should give
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child
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parents
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cannot
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children at
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because it can affect their psyche and socialization. Teenagers may want to leave their
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parents
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home
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by themselves and their
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should
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. Taking into account all of the above, I can say that it is very important to give teenagers live
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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