Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed rather than to work for a company. why might be this case? what could be the disadvantage of being self-employed? give your reasons for answer

These days many people decided to work for themselves
instead
of working some kind of
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like nine
to five
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jobs
and
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etc. In my view, it can
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many positive points
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although
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although
it has some opposite circumstances. Due to the lack of humanity
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some
boss's
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behaviours and
personality
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, employers change their prospects and decided to resign from that office.
For instance
, when employers are doing well at the office as their best
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as a player of a team, the head
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executive
excutive
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executive
officer's behaviour with them and their projects
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like litter. Knowing how to behave
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in front
infront
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in front
of employees
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vital.
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of all, a person with
self-employed
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job thinks, they are always free, they can go to travel and there is no
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concern about the boss's offence,
on the other hand
, their job is always in danger, because, some
jobs
are seasonal or they have peak time to selling items or doing some services, but careers are not self-established are more trustworthy,
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, if you need money to pay your accommodation rent you need a salary and enough budget in spite of that you are not sure if you a self-employed person because there is no income for every single day. To sum up, In my opinion, it is better to
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both of
it
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, work for a company and an office to make yourself sure about your future and
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some self-employed or part-time
jobs
to improve your income. Totally at the
end
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we can believe that hire as an employee is much better and safer for your life.
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  • self-employed
  • work-life balance
  • constraints
  • traditional job
  • steady income
  • responsibility
  • expertise
  • establishing
  • isolation
  • support network
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