Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, it seems we have too many
options
. This
idea would be true in some aspects. However
, I totally disagree with this
statement because more choices
are still accessible for few
Correct article usage
a few
people
.
It is irrefutable that, today, the
modern society and a large population have changed Correct article usage
apply
people
’s lives dramatically. Many people
have been encouraged to be entrepreneurs to create their own brands in order to achieve financial freedom, stability, and prosperity. As a result
, the market has become much more competitive since there are many choices
for one kind of products
. Fix the agreement mistake
product
For example
, twenty years ago, there were just few
local clothes designers in my Change the article
a few
countries
. Now the number has Fix the agreement mistake
country
been
significantly increased, with a wide range of prices. Unnecessary verb
apply
This
could benefit the customers as we have more options
but there is more
profound issue to consider.
Correct article usage
a more
This
is because more options
does
not mean more freedom of Change the verb form
do
choices
. Wealthy Fix the agreement mistake
choice
people
can afford the
better Correct article usage
apply
choices
regardless of price while deprived people
have always been limited to worse choices
due to their financial limitations. For instance
, even if many more schools have opened in my neighborhood
, it has not Change the spelling
neighbourhood
benefit
the lower class because those institutions are private and expensive. Change the verb form
benefited
Consequently
, rich families have more choices
but poor families still have few choices
. There is inequality among people
to have more or less
Change the quantifier
fewer
choices
. Money is the main factor of
having more Change preposition
in
choices
.
In conclusion, the
modern society provides us much more Correct article usage
apply
options
in life. I, however
, think that this
is just an illusion when those options
remain unreachable for many.Submitted by tedielts on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite