For school children, their teachers have more influence on their intelligence and social development than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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students
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developing social development and level of intelligence
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more guidance from
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than
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. I agree that
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can play a crucial role in increasing the level of intelligence of a student but
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much effort into social development.
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spend more
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with their
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and they are quick learners
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this
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my view. To commence with,
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spent weekly more than 20 hours in school but they spent the rest of the
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with their
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, as well as with neighbours and relatives. During
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time
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they always follow their elders and learn behaviours, and social connections from them. In that
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most of the
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parents
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try to teach their
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how to communicate with people and how they can easily maintain
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social relationships.
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,
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learn from their
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how to celebrate a festival with society people like eid, and puja, and that actually helps them to develop their knowledge about the social community.
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, when
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are going to school they get to meet up with different peers of them from several environments and they share the same stage. The
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always encouraged the
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to do some empirical things as well as
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share many real-life experiences that are related to topics with them and that helps them to build their intelligence.
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, if one teacher shows a video
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related to a robot or how planes are made that kind of video actually helps the child to learn some new knowledge about technology. To conclude,
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play an incredible role to make
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more intelligent and
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by developing social connections and by teaching them social activities
parents
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help them to develop
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social communication.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foundational role
  • structured influence
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving skills
  • appetite for learning
  • curriculum
  • learning styles
  • socialize
  • cooperate
  • navigate social norms
  • underestimated
  • role models
  • confined
  • academic year
  • life lessons
  • formative years
  • moral and behavioral development
  • supportive home environment
  • reinforcing
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