Some people believe that children that commit crimes should be punished. Others think that the children’s parents should be punished instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that youngsters should be restricted by the
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while others believe that
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responsibility.
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view is reasonable.
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the one hand, there are several reasons that lead people to believe that juvenile crime. One of them is that kids or teenagers need to be
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responsible
responible
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responsible
for what they have done, especially breaking the
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laws
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.
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, if the punishment applies to young people, they will remember and will not
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reoffended.
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, criminals can use
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to rob a bank, and the police will see the issue that the kid is breaking the rule.
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, they will pass
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problem because they are just
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.
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, I strongly believe that in serious crimes
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should be punished
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because the child is not well educated about
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.
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,if the kids get involved in criminal activities, it is probably because the
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did not teach to their
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distinguish white from black in government.
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, the
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will have to be responsible and
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compensated for what their child did.
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a child
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breaking
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the
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laws
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, it was already the
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parents
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job the teach them probably about good and bad
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to do. To conclude, youth crimes being punished can be justifiable in some aspects, yet I totally believe that
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should be taking the responsibility for their
children
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's upbringing.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accountability
  • consequences
  • deterrence
  • cognitive development
  • punitive measures
  • moral values
  • supervision
  • rehabilitation
  • education
  • root causes
  • domestic issues
  • legal system
  • criminal responsibility
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