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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars

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With the increase in per capita income in many developed and developing countries, nowadays
people
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 can easily afford to buy
cars
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 for their private usage.
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 has resulted in more
cars
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 on the
road
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 which eventually leads to traffic congestion. In my view, excessive numbers of private
cars
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 have a direct impact on creating traffic jams in cities. In past decades, private
cars
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 used to be considered luxury products which could be affordable for rich
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 only.
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, in recent times individual income has increased substantially than previous times due to overall economic growth in many countries.
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,
people
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 prefer buying private
vehicles
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 and commuting in private
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 which can carry fewer
people
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 (4 to 5
people
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)
instead
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 of public
transport
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 which can carry 30 to 40
people
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 at one time.
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, in rush hours more
vehicles
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 run through the
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 containing fewer
people
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, yet using more space.
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, in Bangladesh
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 suffer from traffic jams in the morning since thousands of office or school-going
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 leave home for their destinations using their own
vehicles
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 rather than public
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. In order to minimize the problem, the government can play a vital role.
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, state authorities should invest in improving the public
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 system in
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 a way that
people
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 get interested in using them.
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, the security of using the bus, trains, and other public
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 must be ensured by local law enforcement authorities.
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, the government can impose high taxes on purchasing private
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 which in return will slow down the increasing number of
cars
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 on the
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.
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,
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 can be rationalized in busy areas by restricting for specific days or time for reducing pressure on roads. To conclude,
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people
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 always prefer purchasing private
vehicles
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 as they offer more comfort and security than public
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, an excessive number of
cars
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 causes difficulty in
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 movement.
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, the government should take steps to popularize public
transport
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 in order to reduce vehicle congestion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • car ownership
  • traffic congestion
  • urban areas
  • commuters
  • environmental health
  • public transportation systems
  • incentives
  • carpooling
  • electric vehicles
  • taxes and fees
  • bike lanes
  • pedestrian-friendly infrastructure
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