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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home,leisure, and work activities. Do the advantages of information technology outweigh the drawbacks?

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In the modern world, there is the dominant influence of information technology on the majority of spheres in people’s lives. Despite a few negative consequences, numerous advantages,
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 as the simplification of house cleaning procedures, transition to having work and spending leisure
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 online, are brought due to
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 facility. What could be viewed as a positive side of
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 of information technology in people’s lives is a reduction of
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 for household chores, which can now be used more efficiently.
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, humans can call a cleaning or hire a cook, thereby freeing themselves from these household tasks. By doing it they create more opportunities for them to pay attention to other spheres in life,
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 as family and friends. Even though there is a possibility for a person to become lazy, another benefit of
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 convenience is that people can change the way they work, which may lead to the positive development of their lives. To put it in another way, by choosing to work online, humans free more
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 for self-development and
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.
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, they inevitably become broad-minded. Turning to the disadvantages of the Internet's influence on people, it should be mentioned that there might be two negative consequences. The major drawback of it is that people get too lazy to accomplish various tasks
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 because there is always a possibility to hire someone to do
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, cooking is losing its popularity, as it is easier to order takeout food. The
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 negative consequence of information technology
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 can be regarded as a deterioration of the quality of
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 spent on entertainment. A great example can be
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computer games, when playing which
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person not only reduces the
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 spent on communication with others but
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has
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more
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 spent alone
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himself.
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 trend leads to the worsening of people’s communication skills and the relationship developing between them. In conclusion,
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 using the Internet has certain disadvantages, the positive aspects of it are more numerous and might simplify and improve human life.

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