In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays,many
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schools have severe problems associated with students'
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.
However
,the issue regarding
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behavior
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has
being
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rising gradually and day by day it is getting worse.
This
issue occurs due to
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of
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.
Furthermore
,the world
have
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been globalized and made people addicted to
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world more than having bonds are caused for
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most
of
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common
behavior
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issues
among
children
.
Additionally
, the present modern lifestyle of
parents
also
effected to
child
's
behavior
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.
For example
,the bond between
parents
and
children
are
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an important role
of
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a
child
's life.
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of
children
are aggressive due to
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loneliness. They do not have anyone to listen
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to be with them when they needed. Most of the
children
show some hyperactive
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issues
due to
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of attention.Not only
the
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relationships
,
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but
also
the technology
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childrens'
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behavior
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. Inappropriate social media platforms,video games and unwanted relationships are some causes that, influence
children
with bad habitats.
Firstly
, the school should associate with the
parents
to find a solution regarding the
issues
which,
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by
the
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peers.
Secondly
,
parents
should concern
on
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their
child
's
behavior
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and they should put on their concentration over kids.
Parents
should make them feel like friends.
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,once the
child
feel
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their
parents
,
children
will open up their selves to
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their parents
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.
Finally
,
children
should
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to
choose
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the correct path
of
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their lives.They should learn to use the technology in a correct manner. To summarize, the
issues
with
behavior
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can be solved by the school and
parents
.
Therefore
,adults in society
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should navigate to the correct path through their
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.
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  • parental guidance
  • discipline
  • moral guidance
  • social media
  • detrimental
  • bullying
  • peer pressure
  • overcrowded
  • disengagement
  • disruptive behavior
  • behavioral policies
  • code of conduct
  • parental involvement
  • social and emotional learning (SEL)
  • empathy
  • responsible decisions
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