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Rich people are getting richer, and poor people are getting poorer. The gap between rich and poor people is widening. What problems can the situation cause? What can be done to reduce this gap?

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In recent decades, so controversial is the topic of taking measures to manage the financial
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 between the upper and lower classes of societies, that
economists
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 even have introduced a special indicator for measuring it called the Gini ratio. Among a variety of
economists
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' approaches toward
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 problem, I am interested in heterodox
economists
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' belief that
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 a
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 could lead to exceeding instability in social aspects of communities so governments should balance the
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 to mitigate possible consequences.
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 with, heterodox
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, like institutional school
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, believe that economic inequality will lead to many social anomalies in case of drastic growth.
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, Alvin Roth among one of them explains that, due to the socioeconomic aspect of inequality, sometimes
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 detriment could be the social consequences of the financial
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 among citizens that will lead to corruption, either administrative or else, theft and even personal suicide. There with reference to well-known research, he exemplifies, in countries with a high Gini ratio, above 69%, 31% more corruption and theft cases have been reported. In ,addition he mentions that people from the lower class in
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 societies are more susceptible to depression when they face the opulent class lifestyle.
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, institutionalists, as a remedy for
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 a detrimental problem, provide the government with
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 suggestion that the main key is balancing the distribution of
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 among different categories of citizens. In a more simple wording, they believe neither financial support of the government from poor people nor setting huge taxes on wealthy people would not be as effective as providing the same and equal business, educational and political
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.
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, a student from a poor family if he has a good educational quality, will have the same chance to follow an upper-level class career path, and reasonably would have better financial status in long term, so the overall
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 will decrease the generations gradually. To conclude, as it's mentioned above to prevent from deteriorating social consequences of the financial
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 governments shall focus on decelerating the success-for-successful reinforcing loop through equal distribution of growth
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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