Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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world.Whether
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teenagers should involve in
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activities or not ,is always
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.Major of the younger generations may not agree
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it is always preferable to encourage service
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people,as it
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for society
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influenced quite often.Volunteering for
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works increases communication,boosts confidence ,and provides a sensation of satisfaction.Epitomes to support my work are,when the students step out of
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little world
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and starts to help the crowd around them the
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they interact with others gets elevated.once
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of expressing raises ,that impact will be positive on their confidence levels.
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out of
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tiny world of college,house,and mobiles.Mental health boosts rapidly,as kids of
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age are prone to anxiety and
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spread of information can be obtained by help outs. On the other
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community
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will
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get benefited.
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,numerous members are willing to help the needy,but when they do so by hiring paid employees;
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raises.In spite ,we can take
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teenagers who are quite strong physically.
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,courses that benefit students can
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leisure time.Does it
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future? In one
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part time
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works
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yields them money for fees and commodities. Based on the
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mentioned paragraphs,engaging in service activities is beneficial for both
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it and
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it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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