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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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History
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 in school systems, while others
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 or technology than
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significant
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, but
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 should know how to live in
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 and Technology should be most important than
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 say that
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 because they think that we should always know and reminds our
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 our nation cannot forget heroes like Baurzhan Momushuly, Rakhimzhan Koshkarbaev, and
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 heroes that protect our country
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world
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 war 2.
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, even though
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 know
history
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 very well, he cannot
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on
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 in 2022 without basic views on
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 or Technology, since
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world
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 is in developing, so
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 conditions too.
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 if
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 on themself,
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know
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about informatics
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, or
science
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 on
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 good level because working on themself, in
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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