Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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study more important for
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world
subjects like
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one place, and
people
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world
. So
Science
and Technology should be most important than
history
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important
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at school, I guess
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because they think that we should always know and reminds our
history
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our nation cannot forget heroes like Baurzhan Momushuly, Rakhimzhan Koshkarbaev, and
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heroes that protect our country
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during
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during
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world
war 2.
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, even though
people
know
history
very well, he cannot
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the
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adequate
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in 2022 without basic views on
Science
or Technology, since
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is in developing, so
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conditions too.
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if
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not want to
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should
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know
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, or
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direction
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business or
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crypto working. Both ways require
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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