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Concerning for environment growing and more and more people choose recycle. Others people argue that the recycle is not enough. They suggest we need to consume less. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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As our population is growing day by day, It is
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 is a sharp rise in the production of numerous essential needs which include both biodegradable
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 non-biodegradable items. For the well-being of the earth's ,eco-system a large group of individuals thought that recycling is the best option
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, others believe it is not sufficient. In the following essay, I am going to discuss both
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 and explain why I think
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there is a need to develop other methods
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 recycling. It is
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 fact that the consumption of various commodities is on the rise
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directly or indirectly
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 harsh impacts on the environment. One commonly used method to mitigate
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 is the "Recycling" of goods
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 as paper, electronic items, and more.
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, recently the government has taken steps to ban the use of non-recycled
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, as they are harmful to the ecosystem
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 to living beings other than humans. The awareness among people for
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 steps will definitely make a difference. The positive effects of
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 method are not sufficient, in spite of that, it is a great initiative to recycle
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, there are people who believe it is evident to take
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 steps other than the reuse of items to maintain a perfect balance within the atmospheric cycle. As we have already discussed
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there are harmful impacts on nature, so we have to cut down our rate of consumption. Other than that, these non-degradable
products
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 are flushed into the rivers which leads to water pollution that brings many other problems. As an example of why re-processing is not adequate, I want to add that, making
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 reusable requires various means that are
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 harmful to the environment.
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, I can say that recovery and utilization are good initiatives, even though not so effective.
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, it is essential to find new ways to tackle the problem of waste management to ensure stability in the earth's habitat.

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language improvement
Consider avoiding redundancy in expressions and aim for more precise phrasing. For example, instead of 'is well-known fact', use 'it is well-known that'.
content clarity
Ensure to clarify your opinion in the conclusion more explicitly. It would strengthen your overall argument to reiterate why you prefer one option over the other.
example specificity
Further develop your examples to illustrate your points comprehensively. Provide specific details about the impacts of recycling and consumption reduction beyond general statements.
content understanding
Your essay presents a balanced view by discussing both perspectives on recycling and consumption reduction, which is commendable.
topic relevance
You have effectively highlighted the relevance of environmental issues, demonstrating a solid understanding of the topic.
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